Honest opinions please...

Nice work! Normally I'm the family critic when it comes to proofreading writings, but as of late my brain's still a bit slow (and it's late).... so I don't have any fantastic suggestions, but I see others have already made good comments.

I do however want to point you to this website: http://absw.org.uk/SYWTBASW.htm
It's the British Academy of Science Writers or some such, and they have a nice long pdf on becoming a science writer (It's something I'm considering). Anyway I don't know if that's what you want to do, but it's probably still interesting to read through... enjoy, and good luck getting published! You have taken a great initiative to spread the word on Sleep Apnea!!!!!


- Oh and on a tangent, I think another article on restless leg syndrome / limb movement disorder (PMDS?) is probably also useful, because, for example, I know a lot of people who jerk around in their sleep and they seem to think it's normal, but in fact it's a serious? and treatable condition.

(huh from my writing you wouldn't think i'd be a good proofreader but hey i'm just posting here not writing a dissertation so dont judge me that's all the sense i can manage at 1 am)

Nice article!

You may want to consider dropping the last sentence. Dropping it would add more emphasis to the words "see a doctor'" and would sound more professional. (It almost sounds like you are trying to find an excuse for writing a very informative article. You don't really need one.)

Susan

Very nice article we need to educate more people like this.