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Posted: Sun May 08, 2005 8:02 am
by SailorBoy
My breathing has paused
I think it's my apnea
But find that it snot.
Posted: Sun May 08, 2005 3:53 pm
by BuffaloAl
lol sailor
Posted: Mon May 09, 2005 11:27 am
by photogal
My
Swift pillows came last week
Is this all there is?
What size pillows do I need
I'll try what's already on
hose is on wrong side
Look at book but get no help
Sliding straps over my head
points sticking out weird
ha ha ha it's on backwards
Oh boy velcro routes the
hose
begone you snake thing
Snuggle under the covers
Hey now I can wear glasses
reading my thriller
Yawn woops throat flutters
Two nights down with some success
Things are looking up
I learn to yawn with mouth shut
To tape or not tape my lips
Will try without tape
Wow that worked love my
Swift best
My attempt
Posted: Mon May 09, 2005 12:15 pm
by Howkoolguy
Ok, I have read most of the posts and here is my attempt:
Huiku #1
Full Face Mask I Wear
Mouth Breather by Day and Night
Awake with Face Lines
Huiku #2
Head gear hurts my head
But color matches my bedspread
mask is transparent
Huiku #3
CPAP started with
moderate success so
I continue with
hose
Poetry not my speciality, but I am guessing I did not need to point that out as these appear pretty lame. Who knows, if I wasn't so tired they may be better. Of course if I was so tired from my sleep apnea I would be on this discussion board either.
Oh well, it tried.
Howard
Posted: Mon May 09, 2005 1:55 pm
by wading thru the muck!
Hey Howard,
These are some of the best I've read on this thread. You've managed to capture the seemingly unrelatedness, yet related, irony in the third line. This feature is what makes this form so interesting
Posted: Mon May 09, 2005 6:05 pm
by IWannaSleep
Howard I agree with
Wader, you also did good with the 5-7-5 rule...
Posted: Mon May 09, 2005 7:16 pm
by BuffaloAl
Photogal and Howard,
I really enjoyed both of your haikus. I really enjoyed the way you put into words this...thing, that we sleep with.
Posted: Mon May 09, 2005 7:23 pm
by LDuyer
my compliments too, to the gifted haiku-ers!
Buffalo Al-My Dog Sebastian
Posted: Wed May 11, 2005 3:36 am
by John, RN
That's my Shepherd, the second shep named Sebastian in the family, or Seb for short. If he comes near my snuggle
hose, we'd have to tangle.
Posted: Sun May 15, 2005 9:45 am
by Guest
I can’t tell a lie
Vacant since coming alive
Why? Al sure knows why
But how do you slip
When you’re a blip on the screen
And fall softly down?
Will someone catch you?
Take you down memory lane?
And patch up your wounds?
Or go it alone
Hoping noone will know and
go nutso inside?
Thanks to friend and foe
I know a simpler side and
not vacant inside
So thanks to you all
And a lesson in haiku
I owe it to you